Tuesday, 12 December 2017
Wednesday, 15 November 2017
WALT Using different types of sentences for effect
A tsunami is a large wave on the ocean, usually caused by an undersea earthquake, a volcanic eruption or coastal landslide. A tsunami can travel hundreds of miles over the open sea and cause extensive damage when it encounters land.
Think about the different sentence lengths:
The water is only metres away now. I stand frozen on the beach, praying that the ocean will merely tickle my toes with its cooling surf. But it does not. A huge, roaring sea tiger devours me in one ravenous bite, lifts me off my feet and tosses me like a rag doll towards the hotel. I can’t see. I can’t breathe. This is it. I am going to die…
See how the last few sentences are all short, but one after the other. It creates tension and puts the pictures in your mind that the character really is gasping for breathe.
‘But it does not’ - this sentence is blunt, opposing the sentence before it.
Add in punctuation (make sure you use different sentence lengths):
Round and round and round. I’m like an old pair of socks in a giant washing machine. I am thrown against chairs and tables and plant pots and parasols. Thwack! a heavy cocktail glass falls from the bar and strikes me on the head. blood fills my eyes. I cannot see . Frantically I thrash my arms and legs about, trying to reach the palm tree. I can just make out of my left fingertips brush against the tree trunk and I struggle to grab hold of it then I am caught up in the spin cycle again round and round and round I go scraping against walls and steps and sun-beds and broken bottles I cannot possibly survive this.
Start Here: It was the day when I was left home alone I was standing in my room thinking of what I should do then suddenly the wind closed the door.I laughed and said well now open it'.I froze when the door opened up slowly, my heart pounded I was frightened so I called my parents, when I got my phone out I just got a message the message said "I'm busy honey I'll be home late, there's dinner in the fridge" it was from my mum, I heard weird noises then again another message it said " Your Welcome ". I was very scared that I got goosebumps all over my body, I felt a touch from the back of me I turned around and there was no one there I started walking backwards to the corner of the wall and suddenly I bumped into something tall so I turned around again and boo it was a nun I started screaming and tried to run away but it was to fast that it caught me.